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CJRFM 1 by SCIFIJACKRABBIT CJRFM 1 by SCIFIJACKRABBIT
CJRFM and Related Characters © TEAM HAPPI BOMB // CJRFM

Art © Jack Stevenson 2012

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Comments, faves and crits are appreciated very much!

[[Edit: Added a nice neony blue colour to the text boxes. Night stick out like a sore thumb a little bit but I feel it looks less emo now and more themed towards..well.. the Theme! XD lol]]
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Ah, the CJRFM jump into color.

To start, I like the color scheme of the page overall. The way you contrast the slightest bit of red with mostly blue and grey worked quite well for the mood that it seemed to convey. His disdain is felt quite strongly.

However, I feel as if the jump into color has somewhat dulled out the rich stylistic texture I remember from the original pencil drawings. For example, I recall the background from the second panel to be much more exciting, with a somewhat gritty feel to it. While it retains it's overall mood, it doesn't have quite the same effect for me. On the topic of texture, the faces (well, face) of the character feel a bit flatter, based on the somewhat loss of the sketchy feel. That's not to say you didn't do a great job with color; it's just that a bit of depth seems lost.

While I do enjoy the individual style of the text (which I presume to be handwritten), I find it a bit hard to read sometimes. Often I've had to re-read a section to make sure what I read was right. This style would be suited maybe for a title, or a phrase meant to stand out from general text. I understand the benefits of handwriting in comics, but I'm not sure if it works as perfectly as it could. However, something like Arial or New Times Roman wouldn't work well at all; Just something a little cleaner, and maybe not all capitalized. (I don't mean to be nitpicky, but there are also a couple of spelling errors. Everyone makes mistakes. I know I do all the time.)

Overall, the translation to color has reaped great benefits, but I feel as if the comic I knew has been changed a bit, as far as style goes. Maybe if a bit of that Happi Bomb texture was reintroduced, then it'd stand out a bit more.

But, even though it goes without saying, you did a fantastic job.
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BlackLanternDaddy Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Cheer up dear. At least I'm the one driving the bus! ;D www.youtube.com/watch?v=nq4kZP…
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SCIFIJACKRABBIT Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Student Artist
xDD
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MisterTurtle Featured By Owner May 30, 2012
Now I gots to watch this comic.
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SCIFIJACKRABBIT Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Student Artist
Yaay! ^w^
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Lightclaws Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Student Artist
very good.
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animel0vur Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
the color really matches the situation.
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spay1100 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Awsome! Your starting to color your comics, cant wait for the full comic to be done!
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NickinAmerica Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
Looks better than ever! Cool.
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theubbergeek2 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
could be worse - like Shadowrun London...
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tntdynomite92 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
I like what you've done, but, being a Grammar Nazi, I must correct your writing. "Nothing new about at all," should be, "Nothing new about it at all," or, "Nothing new about it all." Also, "Indivisual," should be, "Individual," while "Amongsed," should be, "Amongst."
I apologize if I sound a bit picky, but.... I like grammar and spelling.
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