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CJRFM and Related Characters © TEAM HAPPI BOMB // CJRFM

Art © Jack Stevenson 2012

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Comments, faves and crits are appreciated very much!

[[Edit: Added a nice neony blue colour to the text boxes. Night stick out like a sore thumb a little bit but I feel it looks less emo now and more themed towards..well.. the Theme! XD lol]]
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Ah, the CJRFM jump into color.

To start, I like the color scheme of the page overall. The way you contrast the slightest bit of red with mostly blue and grey worked quite well for the mood that it seemed to convey. His disdain is felt quite strongly.

However, I feel as if the jump into color has somewhat dulled out the rich stylistic texture I remember from the original pencil drawings. For example, I recall the background from the second panel to be much more exciting, with a somewhat gritty feel to it. While it retains it's overall mood, it doesn't have quite the same effect for me. On the topic of texture, the faces (well, face) of the character feel a bit flatter, based on the somewhat loss of the sketchy feel. That's not to say you didn't do a great job with color; it's just that a bit of depth seems lost.

While I do enjoy the individual style of the text (which I presume to be handwritten), I find it a bit hard to read sometimes. Often I've had to re-read a section to make sure what I read was right. This style would be suited maybe for a title, or a phrase meant to stand out from general text. I understand the benefits of handwriting in comics, but I'm not sure if it works as perfectly as it could. However, something like Arial or New Times Roman wouldn't work well at all; Just something a little cleaner, and maybe not all capitalized. (I don't mean to be nitpicky, but there are also a couple of spelling errors. Everyone makes mistakes. I know I do all the time.)

Overall, the translation to color has reaped great benefits, but I feel as if the comic I knew has been changed a bit, as far as style goes. Maybe if a bit of that Happi Bomb texture was reintroduced, then it'd stand out a bit more.

But, even though it goes without saying, you did a fantastic job.
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ronan11231 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2015
Yeah. New London sucks. Old London is fine. I heard its only called new London because it would get money.
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BlackLanternDaddy Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Cheer up dear. At least I'm the one driving the bus! ;D www.youtube.com/watch?v=nq4kZP…
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SCIFIJACKRABBIT Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Student Artist
xDD
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MisterTurtle Featured By Owner May 30, 2012
Now I gots to watch this comic.
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SCIFIJACKRABBIT Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Student Artist
Yaay! ^w^
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Lightclaws Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Student Artist
very good.
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animel0vur Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
the color really matches the situation.
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spay1100 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Awsome! Your starting to color your comics, cant wait for the full comic to be done!
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NickinAmerica Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
Looks better than ever! Cool.
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theubbergeek2 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
could be worse - like Shadowrun London...
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tntdynomite92 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
I like what you've done, but, being a Grammar Nazi, I must correct your writing. "Nothing new about at all," should be, "Nothing new about it at all," or, "Nothing new about it all." Also, "Indivisual," should be, "Individual," while "Amongsed," should be, "Amongst."
I apologize if I sound a bit picky, but.... I like grammar and spelling.
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someguysname Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This looks awesome, though the buildings are a little flat in the first panel in my opinion.
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ONEeyeStreetBoy Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
I gotta say the city look way more impresive with colore. :)
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:iconz377:
Z377 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Student Digital Artist
COOOOOOOOOL
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HobbsEnd Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Professional General Artist
Nicely done, the panel layout works well with the copy here, providing a jumbled almost claustrophobic feel.
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TomDracoRyu Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice work, just one thing

>indivisual

Individual.
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Sunnycat17 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Student Digital Artist
OMG! COLORED! KKFUUUSHHHHHH!!! :iconepicclapplz:
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:icondereck-lunar:
Dereck-Lunar Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Holy shit colour 8D [link]
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:icontheojeca:
theojeca Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
cool beginning X3
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:icondereck-lunar:
Dereck-Lunar Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Tiens tu aime ce groupe d'artistes aussi? :3
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:icontheojeca:
theojeca Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
ui ba ui X3
J'aime beacuop les ambiances londoniennes et la manière dont elles sont traités ici \m/
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:icondereck-lunar:
Dereck-Lunar Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Moi il y a un truc en plus qui m'attire là dedans X3
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:icontheojeca:
theojeca Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
La poésie urbaine?
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:icondereck-lunar:
Dereck-Lunar Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
mmm... pas vraiment...
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:icontheojeca:
theojeca Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
... (prend un air navrée) les nibards?
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:icondereck-lunar:
Dereck-Lunar Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Un peu mais surtout le style du dessinateur très particulier
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LARS777 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
Are you remaking the pages?
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SCIFIJACKRABBIT Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Student Artist
Colouring them. I have to for college

what do you think of it? I dunno what to think really... I like it...but at the same time im abit "Meh..." about it

~ Jack
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LARS777 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012
I think it looks cool :3
But please try and link them 3:
It's chaotic to keep up with the pages if they're not linked 3:
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